At the risk of exposing myself to severe criticism, embedding my first short. Made it with a couple of other guys. Had put the link up earlier in the movie thread I think, but thought I'd make a thread.
Be kind. :P
Be kind. :P
Short film
- Thread starter Donaldo
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Yes, remember seeing it in the other thread. Very good short movie, mate.
A good first attempt. There are a few things you could tighten up if you're planning on re shooting the same film in the future.
First - The audio quality is not good. Try to get a proper boom mike and portable sound mixer for your scenes. Despite being visual, the easiest way to spot an amateur film is bad audio.
Second - The story is very good, however i think you could improve it by writing in a few extra scenes to unfold your narrative. Try to think of a few extra ways to tell the story in addition to reading a book, eating lunch, and playing football.
Third - Question the moral of your story. I think its a bit cliche to suggest that drugs are bad. Audiences are sophisticated and can easily spot predictable endings. Try to add some conflict to the basic premise of the story.
Fourth - Your editing is good now, although you may want to decrease the time between your cuts IF you have extra scenes to incorporate.
Good effort. Keep it up.
